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Heavy Metal From Germany - Please critique my ad and squeeze page
January 21, 2018
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Hey guys,

started MMM 4.0 in december, tested a bunch of stuff and now I think it is time for you guys to maybe point out what I could improve in my ad and squeeze page. I am not completely unsatisfied with the results so far. But sales could be improved for sure. Here are the stats:

Cost per click: 0.45 Euros

Cost per conversion: 1.60 Euros

Reach: 2,187

CTR: 2.58

Relevance Score: 7

Amount Spend: ca. 30 Euros

Conversions (Objective): 19

Signup Form Conversion Rate: 30.6%

Genre: Heavy Metal, Melodic Metal, Power Metal (just for reference, didn't use these as targeting)

Age: 30-55 (tried it younger, but almost nothing happens below 30)

Audience: Blind Guardian, Helloween, Hammerfall in USA, UK, Canada, Ireland, New Zealand, Australia (I know pretty small ones, but I struggled to get bigger ones working, so I tried it super narrow)

To give you a little insight, the ad copy is a reference to a famous album by Blind Guardian (Somewhere Far Beyond) and the "Keeper" is a reference to the two most beloved Helloween albums from the 80ies, which I choose because these are the kind of things John talked about, when he explained the "merch table situation", things which would get someone to talk to us about common interests in real life.

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SqueezePage: http://tnlmetal.de/metal/freem.....ic-jan2018

Thx in advance,

Marc

January 22, 2018
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Hey Marc,

Helloween... I used to dig them as a kid. been a while since I've thought of them. Now "I want out" is gonna be stuck in my head all day 🙂

Keep in mind that any opinion I have is based purely on an initial impression, but looking at your stats it sounds like your squeeze page and your targeting is really dialed in, but your ad is not. Those conversion rates are great, but your click through rate, relevance score, and cost per click is all a bit low. Not terrible, but definitely could be better.

My guess at what is happening is that the headline in the ad (and on the squeeze page" just doesn't make sense to anyone but the biggest fans of those artists. So when you target the larger audience, many people don't follow what it means. But when those that do click through, a large percentage of them sign up.

The goal would be to create a less obscured headline that gets you more clicks, but which doesn't lead to a lower conversion rate. You may have a little bit of balancing out to do, but this is a great start.

Good job.

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January 22, 2018
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Thx John!

March 11, 2018
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Ok I am stuck pretty hard at this point. I was using pretty specific references to other bands work before with moderate success and now tried to get away from that, like John suggested. So I set up a new ad, changed the squeeze page copy etc. it took me some time, so the traffic on the page was zero for a week or two. So I thought I try optimizing for traffic first again. Just to test the new stuff with some new audiences an photos. This is the 2nd campaign in the photo.

It was fine I thought, not perfect, but now that I knew which photos got me good prices and that the new copy was good too. And I at least got a Sub for about 2 Euros (not display here) which is not THAT good. I know, but as you said John it could come down under a Euro if optimized maybe.

So I picked the best performing audience (I tested three), this one was 330,000 strong and set up the same ad with conversions as a goal. (1st campaign in the photo) At least I thought similar CPC would happen for me. But the the result was very poor. What I am doing wrong here. It is the same ad (as seem below)and the same squeeze page. 

http://tnlmetal.de/metal/freem.....ic-march18

The is the second time I got this happening to me. Optimizing for traffic works fine, but as soon as I switch to conversions it's broken. I hope someone could help.

Cheers,
Marc

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March 12, 2018
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Hey Marc,

It's a little hard to know exactly what is going on without digging around in there. If I am understanding you correctly you are saying that you are using your best performing ad with your best performing target audience but getting different results, correct?

Is the only variable that has changed the fact that you went from traffic to conversions?

Are you certain you didn't accidentally do something different like choose different placements or demographic?

Also, how long have you run each of the ads? 1000 impressions is not much. How many describers did you initially bring in for 2 euros each? You mention "a sub" above. Are you meaning that you only got one sub at that price?

Let me know and we can keep trouble shooting from there.

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March 12, 2018
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Hi John, yes that is correct. I just checked it again, it's the same settings in both.

The ads only ran a day each. I realise that it was a little short maybe. 

When I ran the traffic optimized ad, I got 6 subscribers out of that. With cost me around 12 Euros, which results in 2 Euros per subscriber. Sorry I was a little unclear with that.

March 12, 2018
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Thanks for the info. Typically it takes about 3 - 5 days for an ad to settle out. FB's algorithm needs time to figure things out. It could be that the first ad would have started to do worse or it could be that given more time the new ad would have done well.

The other issue is the budget. FB needs a minimum of about 25 subs per week in order for the algorithm to optimize for conversions. If you have a small budget you may never get there. At any rate, it doesn't sound like you got anywhere near that with the new ad.

Another thing to realize is that there are a lot of variables that determine how an ad performs. FB ascribes a sort of quality score to each new ad. If an ad starts off well it tends to keep doing well. If it starts off bad it rarely turns around. I've had situations where I start a new campaign on a Sunday only to have it tank. Then  start a new, duplicate campaign mid week and it does well. There are many little variables like that. Each time you start a campaign you are largely starting from scratch.

Finally, I'd take a look at the relevancy score of each ad for clues. The relevancy score is just an indicator, but if the relevancy score is lower on the new ad (which I suspect it is) then you know there was a problem.

All you can really do is take everything into account and jump back on the horse and try again with a fresh campaign.

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March 13, 2018
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Ok thx John, I'll try again and let it run for longer. Relevance Score was 7 on the traffic ad. the conversion one I stopped to early to have one.

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7 sounds about right for the price you were getting. On most of my winning ads I have I start out with a relevance score of about 9. Then it drops to about 7 or 8. A campaign with a score of 7 is usually one where things are working but are a bit too expensive, which lines up with your experience.

Let me know how you go.

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Hey John, just reporting back, much better results this time around 🙂 I started a new campaign with 30 Euros budget per day, and let it run for 3 days. With the data I have now I could get that under a Euro or even a Dollar easily I think.

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My conversion rate is pretty good now too I think:

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The big problem now is that I generated just 1 sale out of these 83 subs. Which is pretty disappointing. The click rate also of the discount emails seems pretty low to my eyes. What is a normal amount in your opinion? Could that be a target audience issue too? 

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Thx again,

Marc

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Hey Marc,

Really glad to hear you've got your conversion costs down.

Your click through rates are definitely lower than usual from your third email down. Normally I'd like to see a click through rate that was around half of the open rate. A little less is pretty common.

With such a drop off like that it would appear that either something in your email copy (or blog posts) is turning the list off, or you've targeted the wrong people. I suspect it's more of a copy issue.

Feel free to post elements here (one piece of content at a time please, so it's not too overwhelming).

But the long and short of it is, take a look at whatever people experienced right before the drop off. IE, the "this involves you" email and blog post.

Judging by the title it sounds like you are sticking pretty close to the templates. That can definitly work, but it can also miss if your demographic is different. You may need to insert more of yourself into the content. But maybe post a link to the blog post so we can check it out.

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Hi John, yeah maybe I am staying to close to the template in case of the first email, I have to admit I basically only changed the first lines to fit the free songs I was sending out, and the signature at the bottom of course. The open rate isn't that bad like you said on that one, but I'll think of something new pretty soon. But the first blog post might be the bigger problem, here it is:

http://tnlmetal.de/metal/maiden

thx,
Marc

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Hi Marc, 

To be honest, I though the post was pretty good. There might be some things I would do a little different and maybe a grammatical edge or two that could be smoothed out, but I wouldn't think that this post would cause a massive drop off.

Looking at your stats again, the email open rates are pretty decent. It's just the CTR that is terrible.

What does the body of your music video email look like?

At the end of the day though, regardless of my opinions, all we can do is look at the stats. Something is breaking down with those CTRs. It could be the emails, it could be the content. All you can do is try changing things and getting those numbers up. If the music video angle isn't working, perhaps try something else. Tweak until the stats move in the right direction.

You could also try going for the sale a bit earlier. I don't mean that I would change the funnel. More than I would add a sales pitch to the thank you page after someone signs up, and make a bolder pitch in the content itself. This is something I will be exploring more in the coming months.

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Hi John,

The music video email looks like this:

Hi {!firstname_fix},
 
did you know we got a new guitarist?! Fabrizio just had his live debut with us, check it out now! But be prepared! 😉
 
 
STAY HEAVY,
Marc
and Thunder And Lightning

I have in fact placed a sales link on my thank-you page already:

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Thx,

Marc

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Thanks, there is nothing terribly wrong the email but it's also not necessarily that interesting to someone who is not totally invested in you guys yet. People don't care about the inter workings of a band, so much as they care about a band that is just authentically awesome and entertaining. 

For example, if I got an email that said something like... Our guitar player almost died on stage last night, watch the video here... I would need to click to see what the story was. The idea being that once I did, the music would make an impression.

That's just one sensational example that would only work if you had a story to back it up (like an electric shock or fire while shooting a video) but you get the idea. 

As it stands right now it makes me roll my eyes and think, another band thinks they are amazing. No offense of course. I think that every time an indy band directly talks about their craft.

And it's a very little thing, but the missing capital letter (while you use them at the beginning of other sentences, throws me a little too.

What's the subject line?

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Ok I see what you mean. 

The subject line was: New live video, watch our new guitarist melt some faces off

I have another blog post in the can. This one right here, you think that might be something worth trying?

http://tnlmetal.de/metal/sixty-towels/

Thx,

Marc

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Hi Marc,

I think the new blog post has a funny premise, but I found it confusing in the beginning and a bit hard to follow. There were some simple grammar things that needed cleaning up, but mostly I was just confused as to what the post was about until it was almost over. The headline didn't elude to the towels, so the towels in the sage confused me until I got to the end of the post. There were also a lot of names and business details that I couldn't track with in the beginning.

But I think with a new headline and a bit of cleaning up this direction could work. 

Just my two cents. 

Anyone else feel like sharing their opinion?

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Hi John,

makes me a little sad to hear that the guy that I hired over at fiver to translate the blog post didn't do his job :-/

Well I see what you mean, more stories, less talk about music itself. I have another one, that I wrote it in english myself, so I will ask a friend from the UK to prove read it before I release it, but here it goes (still with some mistakes though 😉 ):

Playing in the netherworld sounds pretty metal to me!

There was that one time in 2009 or 2010 when we where contacted by this guy from Poland. He told us he was running a festival over in Szczecin he wanted us to play at. It is not that far from our home town of Berlin, Germany and even though there was only gas money involved we agreed, just for the heck of it.

The show itself was pretty weird, we were scheduled to play the last slot at 2 am in the morning, basicly after a bigger band. But it was a good show none the less.

Anyway, on the way home at night we stopped at a gas station not far from the venue and met a guy who immediately asked us if we where in a band. Probably because of the van outside. „Yeah, we just played at the candle bar, it was a lot of fun, but they didn’t have enough beer for everybody, haha“ we jokingly replied. What the guy said next, let us kind of question our realm of existence a little bit. „But the candle bar burned down years ago! You could not have been playing there!“

We looked at each other and our singer Diddi said: „Well who cares, playing in the netherworld sounds pretty metal to me!“ Laughing our asses off we found out that the name of the bar was pretty similar to another bar with a polish name, which actually burned down. So we might not have been playing in the netherworld after all, but of course, we would tell everybody that we did.

Because which metal band would not tell the story about the show in the alleged ghost club!

What do you think? Would that one be better maybe?

thx again,

Marc

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Hi Marc,

Steve here.  I think they're both fun stories.  As long as you are in the mindset of being engaging and entertaining, I think you'll be able to get things ironed out with email follow up.  I'm also curious to know which subject lines you are using.

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 Well I haven't used either one of them, but I think it would be:

"They needed how many towels?!!"

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"Playing in the netherworld sounds pretty metal to me!"

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