Hey Mira,

I think the extended third person bit is beautiful. Really great.

I also like the end from the point of where the A & R rep tells you to go solo. 

There was a little bit in the middle where it was a little by the numbers. Where you were moving and in bands and stuff. I'm splitting hairs here, because it's good as it is, but if you really want to knock it out of the park I would think of this chunk as your second act. Where it looks like the ugly duckling is finally going to win, but then a major curve ball is thrown and all seems lost. Ten the last part of the story is where the hero triumphs. 

The more you can stick to real story structure, the more the reader is pulled in, as opposed to a timeline of events. But the first part is really great and the vulnerable stuff is really powerful.

One other note... Reverse the order of your comments so that the most recent appears at the top. That way readers will see the post as current, even if they are reading it 5 years from now.

Mira Morningstar said
Thank you for your awesome feedback, John!

I felt the same about the middle bit actually but wasn't quite sure what to do with it, as it's part of the story but I felt elaborating on it would have made the blog post a bit too long.

I really like your idea about adding these parts to the second post and am wracking my brains how to incorporate it.

Glad I could help. I wasn't actually suggesting you use this as fodder for the second post. I was referencing the classic "second act" of a play. In most plays/screen plays there is a second act where things finally seem to be going well but then a curve ball comes in and knocks our character on their butt and all seems lost, only to use wat they learned earlier in the story (think Jedi skills) to overcome the main obstacle and Triumph. I was suggesting you transform that second bit from a timeline of events to more of a rollercoaster/ classic second act.

The second blog post is a short music video (plus free download of the song). The video is set in my lovely town Glastonbury, so I talk about how this place influences my music. It goes perfectly with my brand, since Glastonbury is known for magic and Arthurian legends and much more along those lines.

That sounds good!

As a side note - what I find odd is that not many people seem to leave comments on blog post #1 (if I do get feedback, it tends to come in via email).

It's hard to say, but I'd guess that is a mix of the personal nature of things, and maybe people wanting to make a personal connection with you as a result, or it could be the "guys being guys/creeps" thing and trying to connect personally. Then maybe the people who are still around on the second post are more of the true fan types. Or maybe it's just the content. Hard to say.

I was worried people might not want to read it/can't connect with it but then I just noticed it has over 90 shares on socials (so far it has been sent to under 400 people). I thought that was interesting and hopefully an indicator that people do connect with it.

Totally. And just to make sure... you're not using a fake share count setting on that are you? 90 out of 400 is a pretty hard to believe ratio.

But I'm guessing my numbers and budget are still small, so it's probably way too early to come to any real conclusions.

Yeah, but indicators look healthy.

Thank you also for your suggestion to change the order of the comments, I didn't think of that!

  

Definitely worth doing. My pleasure.

There is a setting in that sharing plugin that allows you to set a fake sharing metric. It works on an equation like, the number of words in the post divided by something else. I don't remember. Often we use it just so the count is not zero. It sounds like you have that on. The recent edits would account for the change in the number. I don't know how to verify the number of times a website page has been shared, only a facebook post.

No need to start a new thread, this is all consistent with your original question/post 🙂

Cool. That indicates they are real, but it's a surprisingly high number. You could try adding a different plugin and see if it shows the same number. It should be the same since (I believe) it's pulling the data from FB's API. But at the end of the day, it doesn't really matter. It's either real or it's not, but the impact doesn't change. Since you haven't done anything to fake it, you might as wll just assume the best (that they are legit) and call it a day 🙂

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