Hey David,

Glad you enjoyed it. You definitely put in a lot of hard work and I think you made some great strides. 

I think the blog posts reads well and does all it needs to. I also think it will resonate with a classic rock fan. If I have any constructive criticism it would be that the stories will work best if you are able to make them a little more inclusive. Instead of having everything from the perspective of I and me, it might help if you told the story from a slightly more observational point of view that ultimately allows the reader to put themselves in your shoes.

For example, "I loved the band Kiss", could become "What kid in the 3rd grade didn't love the band Kiss." I'm just making that line up so don't take it as a literal suggestion, but in the second example I am allowed to see myself as that kid, in the first example I am forced to listen to a stranger's story about themselves.

That make sense?

This doesn't mean you can never use the word I or me, it just means you might do better using this more inclusive approach in your stories.

All of that sad, I think what you have reads well.

Hey David,

My only thought about the new post is that it starts out with info about your new CD. It instantly feels like a marketing message as apposed to a story. My advice would be to try and tell a story that is entertaining in it's own right but pertains to the music.

Remember that format from the workshop...

Start in the middle (slam into the action).

Go back to the beginning.

End with a transformative experience of some kind.

As for the setting, you can find those settings by going into your WP dashboard >> Mashshare in the left side bar >> settings >> position drop down >> bottom.

Cheers.